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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba here with your requested review!

First of all, I was hooked by your story summary and am very pleased that the first chapter lived up to my expectations. :)

You said that you're worried about having your OC be friends with Gryffindor canon characters, but I don't see it as a problem. Dean and Seamus are minor enough in the canon that it's totally plausible for them to have close OC friends. I think it would be more problematic if someone like Hermione suddenly had a good friend who we'd never met before. :) I also really like that you've made Edie a Hufflepuff; it's good see the other houses get some representation.

Assuming that the next chapters continue at this quality level, I also don't think you need to worry about readers losing interest before Oliver shows up. Your characters are relatable and your writing moves along at a good clip. The reference to Leprechaun had me laughing out loud.

I like that you capture the experience of being in your mid-twenties, underemployed and not quite grown up yet. I think it's an experience that many people can relate to. :)

I'm looking forward to reading about bad dates, crappy jobs and how Oliver Wood's quidditch career dried up!

Author's Response: Hufflepuff is totally the underdog of the four houses. I don't think they get enough respect. :) And I appreciate your assurance; I just get nervous when OCs are best friends with guys, so I tried to make it as non-flirtatious as possible... or as non-flirtatious as Seamus Finnegan could possibly be.

How many times can I say that I love Seamus Finnegan? I imagine him being really passionate, loyal, quick-to-anger and stubborn. He's so fun to write!

And I really wanted to write a story that deals with this time in the characters' lives (I say "this" because I am in the same situation; many readers might not be.) But it's a huge part that almost everybody has, or will have to, face in life.

I really appreciate you taking the time to review! I'll definitely be back when the next chapter is up ;)


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