You really have a knack for one-shots, Lottie, and I say that very seriously -- you've written two of my all-time favorite ones, and now you've packed a pretty tough emotional punch with this one. I'm really enjoying getting to read more and more of your writing, as varied the time between my doing so is!
I think one of the more refreshing pieces about this story, ironic as it may seem to say so, is that Rose is very much under no illusions about her fate. So often in fictional portrayals of things like -- well, like cancer, then those experiencing it are chipper and positive and wholesome and upbeat to the very last. And while it probably does some good to imagine people that way, I think from a purely objective viewpoint (as I cannot speak from experience) that the reality is probably more like what you've painted here. Rose is not a happy person, not by any means, and I sympathize all the more with her for that. She is grumpy and moody and bitter and I think that's not only a brave depiction of the thing, but very possibly a true one. It might not have been the easiest thing in the world, and that's why I admire it.
You write in such a lovely, mellifluous style, too. Each word seems carefully chosen, and there's a lovely, natural imagery -- the sun and the nighttime -- and then just beautiful imagery in general -- the parallel of fading words to Rose's imminent death -- that serve to juxtapose just how sad the story really is. And I do feel sad for Rose, just because you can tell, even in her narrative, there's too much life in her for her to die just yet. But you've let me down gently in the writing of it, style-wise, and I'm okay with that. :3
And one more quick thing: I love the bit in your author's note, where you mention that if you hadn't used Rose's name, this story could have been about anyone. And that's so true -- it really is. We really are not that different. I loved the way you phrased that. ♥
I know I've said it before, but I really do need to make it a better habit to come over here and read more of your writing! You are talented, Lottie dear. :) I really enjoyed this!
Author's Response: Aww, Rachel, you're too lovely to me :3 It's true that I do enjoy writing in snippet form, and certainly don't have an aversion to one-shots, because they let you try genres out so easily! and thank you so much; your lovely reviews are invaluable as help to improve my writing :D
Interestingly, that's exactly why I wanted to write this in the first place - because in so many stories, the main character is so chipper, at least towards the end, and if this ever happened to me, I know I'd not be a hopeful and happy angel but a moody one. There's just not much to go off. So I'm glad it seems original and refreshing, because I just felt like dispelling the illusions (though attaining coherency in my ideas was difficult!)
Aww, thank you so much! :3 I do enjoy writing descriptively, though because it so often gets out of hand, cutting this one-shot down so it could fit into the EWC counts challenge (and not making it) helped me to pick and choose ideas carefully. I'd be tempted to do it again, since I do love my imagery, and I am glad it didn't come across as unnatural or pretentious! Although I'm glad that her life seeps through - it just felt when I was writing that she was wanting to escape, live anywhere else, be someone else; but I don't want to depress readers, either :P
Ooh that actually occurred to me at the beginning of this story; was trying to decide who to write for, and couldn't decide for a long time. So eep! Thank you :)
Aww thank you so much, Rachel! I do so enjoy getting your reviews, and thank you for such a lovely one here too :D