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Review:Veritaserum_Girl says:
It's me; from my review thread.

I think that you're off to a very good start, here. I'm not sure, exactly, where your story is going, so far, but I like it. I think that the way you started was a really good way to draw the reader in with the news radio broad cast.

I really like Grace's character, and I have a really good visual of her personality. I also think that you've done a good job with Rose, as well. I always believed her to be the brave, studious, hard-working type, but with a dash of sarcasm here and there.

But, I feel like you could have introduced Louis a little better. I think that you should have elaborated a little more on the type of relationship he and Grace have; friends, frienemies, enemies, ect.

But, I would really like to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Hmm, you're not really meant to know what's going on yet, but it'll become clear. I did plant a few clues, but I wasn't really expecting anyone to get them... I'm glad you got a good idea of Grace's and Rose's personalities, because this story is going to be quite character driven...
I know the Louis introduction wasn't perfect, so thank you for sort of backing up my 'this isn't so good' metre. I thought it was a little quick, but I couldn't see any other way to introduce them. Just for clarification, she's sort of on the good side of acquaintance with him. You'll get to find out soon, because I'm just about to put the next chapter into the queue!


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