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Review:caoty says:
Hey there, caoty here with your requested review. :)

So this was, indeed, very cute. Christie is all kinds of adorable here, and I even found responsible!Harry made me smile, too.
Not many writers can successfully pull off a child's characterisation, so well done.

That said (brace yourself):

I'm not sure about Amy Bellnam, to be honest. It feels a bit random, like you're saying "Oh and BY THE WAY WHILE DH WAS BEING DONE Theo was going out with this Ravenclaw chick that everyone knew but somehow didn't make into canon (unless she did and I missed her, if so, sorry)!" You know what I mean? It just feels a bit AU, and while I know this technically is AU, it was a bit jarring. Maybe you could've used one of those Ravenclaw girls who were in the books, like Padma or someone.

There were also a fair few typos - missed commas and apostrophes, stuff like that - and Americanisms.

All in all though, this was in fact cute rather than horrible, so well done. :)

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