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Review:SereneChaos says:
Ah! I can never get enough Hannah/Neville!

I like the premise of the story you had in your summary--that love takes time. I loved some of the little IC things you included: Neville liking other girls before (I'd love it even more if you addressed the potential Neville/Luna ship at some point), the way Neville's narration got carried away when he talked about how he loved herbology (perfect), when he mentioned that he was interested in things other than the Mimbulus mimbletonia, etc.

My only real critique is that page breaks or dividers between scenes would be super helpful, and that at times the language seems a little...antiquated for a 15 year old to be using.

Example: "I needed to get fit, I pondered wearily. It was so heavy, but I darenít complain even though we only went a couple of feet once we got through the crowd at the doors and in the Entrance Hall."

I think it's fantastic he thinks he needs to get fit, but the word 'daren't' seems noticeably out of place. You didn't do this too often in the chapter, but it's a little thing to be aware of later.

As a Neville fangirl (and someone who would totally be Hannah if she was in HP world), I think your characterization is spot on, and I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this!

Author's Response: Thank you. I suppose the daren't is just habit of me constantly writing fics about Hermione. Will edit. Thanks!!

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