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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Another great chapter. I love Hannah's character so much! We get a really good feel for her and Rona especially, though I'd like to see a bit more development with Edie and Penny. Clearly Edie is nurturing to her brother and is definitely under constant stress for running around after him, but that's all I've really gotten from her. Also, Penny is head-over-heels for Percy and a bit assertive, but I haven't seen much to separate her from Rona, for example (except that she is a bit more of the instigator.)

Either way, I really enjoyed this chapter. The banter between the friends in their corridor and at breakfast was great. I particularly loved Edie "editing" her paper without her quill actually touching it. Also, Edie is the name of my character for my Oliver/OC and you had me panicked that I'd named her after a canon character, haha.

I was a bit confused by Oliver's parting statement, particularly about publicly mortifying Rona and stories with him in them. It seemed that Rona was confused as well, so maybe that was just your goal--to leave the reader feeling similarly confused.

Reading right along. :)

Author's Response: You're now witness to my great love of large casts 8D Game is sort of like, my kitchen sink fic. It was my first fic and I had basically attempted to stick everything that I wanted into it, and some elements were done better than others. Game lacks a strong supporting cast, but it is something that I've learned from since. One of the fics I write now, Capers, is a rotating-PoV fic that has two leads and three additional main characters. My other fic, etc etc, has two leads and a supporting cast of five. They're much more entwined into the plot/subplots and fleshed out, and learning from Game's mistakes helped a lot.

Game is the only fic where I've been able to write proper girl comraderie though, because none of my other fics have it so that all the girls in the same year are close friends. That's something I can only find here.

Guh, let's just say I was muddling with another plot hole LOL! There were a lot of strange explanations admittedly, but if you make it past the sixth chapter, things start making sense from there because there was actually a two year hiatus between writing the sixth and seventh chapters, and I was older and learned how to plan after that xD


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