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Review:caoty says:
So cartography's a common motif in the R/S fandom, and I've read so many angsty map-filled one-shots from Remus' POV that I am close to having sworn off them altogether.

I'm glad I haven't.
So, I shall commence gushing:

I really liked the structure of this, you know, the whole introspective-paragraph-or-so --> scene --> introspective-paragraph-or-so thing. The way you've done that allows the impact of the scenes, both when they occur and in retrospect (if that makes sense), to really sink in. It's very effective.

You've also packed a bit of a punch with individual sentences, too, my favourite of them being:

>The distance between them is bridged by murmured apologies.

Because that is exactly how we all wanted R/S to be in the end, after everything that happened.

Remus is perfectly in character here too, with all his therapy-what-therapy-ness (you know what I mean by that, right? His despair is an introverted despair which makes itself known in its silence, etc.), and the idea of creating a Marauder's Map of Grimmauld Place is also perfect.

As for your timeline concern: it was fine for me, because I'm used to this kind of thing, but maybe not everyone would have picked up that the Remus-with-wet-shirt scene is set in the First War. If you want to, you can stick a cultural reference in there near the beginning to contextualise it, but you don't have to.
It'd probably be the same for the post-Azkaban one, too.

Anyway, this was lovely, and I'm glad you've asked me to review it - especially since, yes, I'm apparently still your Colin Creevey. XD

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