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Review:LittleWelshGirl99 says:
Crikey! This was pretty intense, and god, the moments with Daphne were heart-wrenching. Does she have PTSD? I really want to find out more about her condition, whatever she has, and what caused it. It must be such a terrible for Astoria to have to deal with - a constant reminder of everything the war took away, damaged.

Astoria seems so lost, really, that's the only way I can think of describing her. The fact that she didn't want to have a day off work because she had nowhere else to really go really pulled at me, I felt so awful for her. But Christian seems nice - he evidently cares about Astoria a lot. He seemed like a great co-worker I have to say :)

It was all so well-written and captivating, now I just want to see a little more of the plot snaking in!

This is such a brilliant story, I really hope you keep on with it! You have a real talent :D
~annon

Author's Response: Hello!

I feel like some evil genius sitting here writing this story. I have picked on such a dark topic and have weaved such a mysterious story and everyone seems to be really intrigued by what I have planned to come. And it's great, but it definately feels like I've found some dark secret about writing and getting people absorbed into a story...either that or I'm really tired and really weird. xD

Anyways, Daphne's scenes were hard to write. I myself was getting anxious as much of that scene was plotted and played out in my head before I actually wrote it. So heart-wrenching is definately a good word to describe her moments. And it is sort of like PTSD but it has this twist to it and that should be coming out in the next couple of chapter's here actually so I won't say too much more...

And Astoria...Oh dear, I feel so bad for all this stuff I'm piling on top of her...between her sister's breakdowns and her parents lack of support, I'm just amazed at how her character has changed from the initial view I had of her. She definately is much more grown up than I initially expected her to be when I started writing.

And I think the plot starts making it's move in the next chapter, or at least a big part of it will start being pushed really soon...

Thank you so much for the review!
~Grimmerz


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