Rachel, I cannot believe tht you are apologizing for the darkness in this chapter -- it was perfect. I know that you said you didn't intend for this story to be this depressing, but honestly your ability to transport the readers into the depths of dispair and horror that your characters stuck at Hogwarts are subject to will make the end all the more gratifying. I'm consistantly amazed at the way you craft the experiences of so many characters in such stark realism. You don't just tell us how Charlie is faring... you allow us to fare it along with him. And let me tell you, I love Charlie Weasley -- I had actually forgotten about him until this chapter (sad, I know) and then you handed him such a crucial role -- his experience and his hope and his horror at the display of Harry represents so much more than just his personal experience. He more or less is every one of the prisoners working in castle... he is every person who once believed Harry to be the savior of the Wizarding world. He is everyone who has somebody on the outside and wonders whether or not he should even hope to see them again. And what a lovely job he does with playing all of those roles.
And then there's hermione. Goshhh. She's such a strong individual in canon, and you really are doing a phenomenal job of capturing that in this story. I cannot wait for Ron to come in and save her. I hope that he is on the back of a dragon in armour brandishing a wand like a lance. :P I kid, I kid... but seriousy. Ron's a babe... he could totes pull it off. Remind me to mention something about hermione's broken wrist to you sometime -- I have a medically relevant suggestion for you. :)
Annnd Dean. I know that in a story like this, casulties are a must and that using names of characters minor to your story but familiar to readers packs a punch of emotion and realism. BUT DEANNN. CREY. I just feel really badly for Seamus now with Neville and Dean and Harry gone... poor gryffindor house, dropping like flies. I suppose that's what they get for being the 'curageous' house. :(
Anyway, this is a long and nonsensicaly rambly review for which I apologize, but your story makes me think and feel so many things that it can't be helped.
Can't wait to read the next chapter!!
Author's Response: I'm honestly so, so pleased that you're enjoying how dark this story, Mel. ♥ And I guess when I type that out it seems like a bit of a paradoxical statement -- but I love darkness. I love sad stories, dark stories, angsty stories, stories with rain and tears and shouting and blood and all that. And here, I wanted no barriers, save for ToS. So your comments... they're so, so appreciated. :)
I don't question that you forgot about Charlie; he's not really cropped up in any other chapters, has he? Nevertheless, I could not abandon him, because he is one of my favorite Weasley boys! I love your comment about his really being exemplary of every other prisoner in the castle, because really, that's pretty true. I /want/ you to feel what he's feeling, and the fact that you are makes me really happy!
Now, did you look at my plot notes? That is EXACTLY how Ron's going to charge in! ;) I'm very excited for you to read more on Hermione, and more on just how this whole save-the-castle-from-doom-and-gloom goes down; somehow, I feel it's not what people are expecting... but I could be wrong, and it could be exactly what you guys are expecting. We'll see! :P
Isn't that weird, though, that a lot of the Gryffindor boys of that year are dead? Ugh, now that you've brought that up... Harry, Neville, Dean. That would be so strange, to know that sixty percent of the boys in that small, circular dorm room are dead. Wow. I've never thought about it like that before.
You are fab. ♥ Thank you so much for coming by to leave such a sweet review on this!! I'm so honored to have you as a reader. :3 Should be posting the next chapter sometime later today!