When I saw you'd posted in the review battle - and with a new story, no less! - I knew I had to jump in ;) And I was totally right - just the title is amazing to begin with: 'Against the Dying of the Light'. Such a powerful line, such a powerful title. You also seem, even from the word go, to have linked the title to your story, which is lovely.
So, wow. I'm not the biggest fan of OCs, as you probably know already, but... gosh, you shatter every cliche about OCs with Lila. She's not quite an OC since her mother is a canon character, and so it's easier to connect to her than it would be otherwise. Honestly, she's such an interesting character. She seems so self-assured and daunting and just terrifying and more than a little insane. But she's also so loyal to her mum (the way she defends Lavender when the little firstie insults her) and she definitely has more than her fair share of flaws. It's just... gah, such wonderful character construction. I'm guessing that some of her behaviour could be explained by the fact that her mum was mauled by Greyback, so she could have inherited some wolfish tendencies??? I dunno, but it's just a thought that came to mind while I was reading...
While there's not hordes of plot in this and I'm not too sure where you're going with it and what sort of thing is going to happen (other than a possible Albus/OC romance-type-thing - could Lila handle a romance? O.o) that's not a bad thing with this story. It could be, but it's not. It doesn't seem to matter because Lila is such a strong character and so she can carry it without needing a hugely complicated, fast-paced plot.
I loved the interactions in here. They weren't hugely interesting interactions in terms of what happened and normal situations, but because Lila doesn't react or think like normal people, they were interesting and different, you know.
The History teacher... I'm not sure if I like him or not. I think he's definitely interesting and I'll be looking out for future lessons and things involving him. Not too sure about the 'lit' etc. part of it, though. Most schools don't allow that, so I don't think Hogwarts would either. McGonagall would have a fit, I don't doubt ;)
Honestly, though, that was the only thing I could find with this which I thought was perhaps odd or even just slightly odd or out of character or anything like that. The flow was perfect - I love the way you have it divided up into different sections, each with a totally different scene and different interactions. It kinda highlights the way Lila thinks and the fact that she's obviously not normal at all, and almost an animal, in a sense (she certainly thinks of herself like an animal, at any rate).
So... yeah. I'm really glad I found this and I really enjoyed reading it! :)
Author's Response: hellooo! It seems like FOREVER since we last talked, which is unacceptable ;) This review made me smile so much, THANK YOU about a billion times! The first review on this story was one of the best I've ever had :3
Ah, all title credit to Dylan Thomas, he is amazing and I adore the poem I got the title from! I thought it really fit what I have planned so that was awesome because I usually get titles really badly wrong :)
Gah, yes, Lila. I had the flu when I thought her up, so I don't know whether that affected her penultimate characterisation or not, but hey who cares. :P But ooh that Greyback idea is actually something I hadn't considered! It was going to be something that happened in her childhood, but I think I'll work in the Greyback thing as well now. :)
Well no, I wasn't planning on introducing the plot for a little bit, but there definitely is one! But I'm enjoying playing around with different writing styles at the moment, so this story is going to be a little... warped. I'm not sure how else to describe it, but it also links in with your comment about interactions, because there's going to be a lot of those - I want to make people see normal things through Lila's eyes i.e. very differently. But yeah. Thank you!
Already changed some bits about the history teacher! I'm planning to keep him though because I need him later ;)
AH, this review has made me so so happy. thank you so much