I will admit right now, romance is not my forte, so expect this review to be several kinds of terrible.
So this is a very compelling account of, I guess, the cost of war - trauma and depression and loss, and you've shown that well while also having your characters move on with their lives. You've struck a good balance. Well done.
This line in particular stood out to me:
>His smiles were weaker now too and he drank too much
Because it just sums up an entire story in a line, and it's fantastic.
Maybe, though, if I'm being entirely honest here, we could've done with more information - more setting the scene, if you like. I haven't read any of your other fic before so I don't know what your timeline is like, but I personally would've liked to know how George ended up in this situation in the first place - or maybe put in a warning in your author's note that new people might not understand without having read A Force of Wills, or something.
And there were a couple of typos here and there, so you may want to check that again or get a beta.
Other than that, though - yeah, it got a bit CC-heavy, didn't it? - this was interesting, and I might drop in for a look at some of your other stuff in the future. :)
Author's Response: Hello!
Well, I honestly didn't expect you to pop over and read this one-shot! I really, really didn't. But what a surprise for me! :D
Anyway, this whole one-shot is from my story "This is Angelina", which I did put as a warning of sorts in my A/N. "A Force of Wills" is something different but there are one-shots for it too so be warned if you wanted to read those.
ANYWAY! Thanks for liking that line, I'd typed this story up rather quickly and hadn't gone through as much proof-reading and all that so my apologies. And I do think I'll probably go back and add in a bit more detail, it was something I'd been planning on doing but didn't get around to.
And if you are going to read more of my work, be prepared for more typos, horrible grammar problems and so on and so forth. I'm most likely not going to get a beta or anything but I'll go through and edit and such whenever I have the time. I don't consider myself that great of a writer to be honest but I like handling my mistakes first hand. It makes me feel like I'm improving. Does that make sense? No?! Darn. Hahah.
Well, if you do or don't drop back in to read something else of mine, it was nice replying to your good review! What were you so worried about anyway? :D
Anyway, I'll catch you on the forums and thanks for being such a dear and reviewing!
Much love of course,