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Hello! I'm True Author with your requested review! =]
First of all, I must say that this made sense. ;) I'm Indian and English is not my first language, but still, I understood this. This is beautifully written fic.
Other thing I liked is Snape's characterization. From the first book, the reader believes that Severus Snape is a cruel, emotionless character and in the end, JKR stuns the reader with that amazing twist- "The Prince's Tale". Since I knew that he loved Lily, I never thought he was a villian. The point is, I've never read about Snape like this. I'm tired of stories, in which the authors keep telling us how Snape wasn't sorry about his envy for James and blah blah blah. But in your story, Snape's feelings are realistic. After all he was a man, so he must have been sorry.
Anyways, the grammar, the plot, the characterization, and everything else is fantastic. I just thought you should have written in seven parts or you should have mentioned that there are three sins.
Hope this wasn't harsh! =]
Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for reviewing this so quickly -- and I'm glad that the story made sense to you, especially as a nonnative English speaker. :3 That's a pretty neat thing to hear, because sometimes I know that my one-shots can be a touch... abstract. But anyway!
I'm SO happy you liked Snape's characterization, too. He's a character I write a lot of (a short story collection, two novels, several one-shots...) and his characterization is pretty well-defined in my head, so hearing that people like it is pretty important to me. I actually hated him right up until Deathly Hallows, and now he's one of my favorite characters! I think it's very important for people to paint him realistically, the good and the bad, and that's something I always, always strive to do when I write him. He is a human more than anything else; he loves, he hates, he's guilty of things and innocent of others. He is HUMAN, if I may say it again, and I seem to have gotten that across to you here. :D Which is awesome!
Ahh, I do think there was a bit of confusion. :3 It's true that there are three defined sections to this story (with, of course, present-time scenes enclosing them at the beginning and the end). But there are actually all seven sins represented in the story. There are three in the section marked 'one.', three in the section marked 'two.', and one in the section marked 'three.' That is why they're listed out, and why I mention all seven. They aren't explicit beyond the lists, but hopefully you can pick them out and see that they appear in the order listed. I hope that makes sense to you!
This review wasn't harsh at all, no worries. :) And I hope I've cleared up a bit of that confusion for you! Thank you for being so kind as to review this for me, and I hope you get the inclination to return soon!