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Review:True Author says:
Hello! I'm True Author with your requested review! =]

From the way you requested, I thought you are really disturbed by a review you received, so I read this carefully and that's why I'm reviewing after a while.

First of all, I honestly don't think this contains too much descriptions; it's your own style and don't try to change it! =] Alicia is perfectly characterized just like Anya. Their unusual relationship is great. You're moving on a bit slowly, but that is also your own style so don't worry and please don't pay attention to the reviewer. ;)

As for this chapter, I really thought there are unnecessary dialogues at some places, so you should just merge them together at a few places or you can describe the reaction in the form of their facial expressions. That will certainly be better.

I hope this wasn't harsh! I was just trying to help you. Oh and please don't stop writing this. =]

Author's Response: Hello there. Allow me please to apologise for the humongus lateness of my reply. Please believe me when i say that It did not come from lack of priciation for your patience in reading my story and for your very nice words, which i deeply apriciate. I was indeed very disturbed by a review i got a while ago (it has been deleted now, probably got reported, though not by myself) and it took me a while to gather the courage to come back to my sotries. It's no exuse, seeing since i had requested your review myself, so again, I apologise.
I am aware that i tend to desribe too much sometimes. I see some things so clearly in my head that i want them to be perfectly clear to the reader as well, and in the process i forghet that sometimes less is more. I have tried to find a balance between description and dialgue, but like you said, sometimes i over do it.
I have already edited some parts out and substituted lines of dialogue with just a few words on facial expressions and such, like you suggested. I am trying to keep my style, but i also want to improve and there is no point in refusing to change and implement critics to my writing - otherise i would never get better. You were not harsh at all, belive me. Im not fragile when it comes to critics, i take them very well and apriciate every word because i take my improvement as a writer seriously. The reason i was so shaken by that review was that it basically said every angle of my story was crap, which can be disheartening even to hte most stuborn of us.
Again, Im sorry for the late reply, and thank you so much for your insight. I will definitely keep writing, promise.

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