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Review:dobbys_socks says:
Hi, it's dobbys_socks from the forums with your requested review.

Wow, this was beautiful. The whole theme of the seven deadly sins being the exact path he took to losing everything is brilliant, and hope at the end destroying him, and the imagery was amazing.

At some points you may have been a bit excessive with descriptions, for example the line "Six, if he walked quickly and pushed the muscles in his legs to move faster." Adding the second part wasn't really necessary. That's like, the only fault I found though :).

This was the best Snape/Lily I've read (I'm not kidding) and I'm adding it to my favourites. Well done, it was awesome.

dobby

Author's Response: Thanks so much for doing this, and getting back to me so quickly, too! I'm so happy that you enjoyed it; I got really into the topic of fitting the seven deadly sins into Severus's life, and of course, adding an eighth of my own. Hearing that you thought it was (to rephrase a bit of your review) brilliant makes me so, so happy, because I feel like I've accomplished in this story what I set out to!

I appreciate your comment on the excessive nature of the descriptions, though, with all due respect, I think I'll leave that particular line into. That one comes from my own experience; when I'm walking quickly across campus, or going somewhere in a hurry, I push the muscles in my legs, and that burn's a familiar one, you know? A fairly large portion of my writing things like that come from my personal experience. :)

Your comment about this being the best Snape/Lily you've read TOTALLY made my day! ♥ That's a huge compliment, and I'm honored you said so. Thank you for taking the time to leave me a review on this story! :3


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