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Review:academica says:
Hi there! I'm stopping by from Review Tag :)

So this is a pretty strange genre combination, but I'd say you pulled it off! I really like how you characterized Amycus as being this really twisted individual. He reminds me a little of Bellatrix, but his madness seems to have a more coherent quality in places, so I don't feel like you just copied her characterization over onto him. I also like the dynamic between him and Neville. This is a good way to show how Neville grew up over this year.

This is tiny, but I like how you made that tiny reference to Draco. Sometimes, because his life diverged significantly from those of his classmates after his fifth year, I forget that he would still have been a student during this time, and that he would have been expected to take classes like the rest.

The one thing I was a little confused about was the ending. You made reference to the DA earlier in the piece, so I don't quite understand the significance of those last two lines -- was it just that he found a way for them to meet without being captured? I think it would have had a little more impact for me if you hadn't mentioned the DA at all until the end.

Nice work! :)


Author's Response: Hello there!
Yeah, I just remembered that I did that weird combination. It was originally going to be an all humour fic, but it just lacked that I guess? I don't know how to word it. :p
Whenever I read Amycus, I always felt like he was a little mad - so I'm glad that I pulled it off! :D
Glad you liked the reference to Draco, you can't have a Hogwarts era fic without him! ;)
The ending was when Neville hides in the RoR and then Harry, Ron and Hermione find him a little later. Maybe I'll go back and try to get rid of the mention of the DA in the first place, it does seem like a better idea. :)
Thanks for reviewing and thanks for the tips! :D

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