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Review:caoty says:
Oh, this is wonderful.

So you start off with Gellert, but don't reveal his identity until a good while through, which is very effective - it allows us to sympathise with him freely, because we don't yet know that he's an imperialist. And you write him beautifully. Honestly. You've really written the experience of his situation - the texture, the colours - absolutely perfectly.

And then you have lines like this:

>His eyes glitter, capturing the light and holding it prisoner.

And that makes me jealous of your ability because this line is all kinds of brilliant.

And now moving onto Albus... who hasn't read the letter... you tease! I wanted his reaction!

He is perfectly in character here, and I love all the little details of Hogwarts you've mentioned, like the sky which he has enchanted reflecting a storm outside (that's a lot like the A/G story as a whole) and the presence of Tom Riddle. I just love that he's there. It brings a certain sort of inevitability to the story, you know, as if you can never defeat Dark magic, you can only subdue the current Dark wizard. I don't know if that was what you were going for in this chapter, but that is what I took away from it.

I'm very impressed by this so far (if you couldn't tell!). I'm intrigued as to where you'll go with it, so you may see me around in the future. :)

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