Wheee! I'm here! And I'm late again, so I'm really, really sorry!
Okay, this definitely HAS to be my favourite chapter so far! Because, honestly, I never thought about what would've happened if something went wrong before Remus's transformation or if he got held up for whatever reason! So I was very intrigued from the very beginning by the concept of things going amiss and I wanted to see how this will affect the transformation process itself. AND YOU DID IT! I think this is the first time in this story that you go into the details of the transformation! I think you did it so incredibly well and you made Remus's pain so genuine just through your description of what was happening and it made me really sympathise with him.
Then, while I was really into the transformation scene, I got a glimpse of the word 'Snape' and I realised what you were up to! I got even more excited because I have a thing for Severus. I really enjoyed the conversation between Severus and James; I really like that you've included that and made us see how Wolf/Remus was reacting to everything! Oooh, that reminds me! The most brilliant thing about that scene was seeing how Wolf has developed this sense of loyalty regarding the other three, how they really have become his pack, and how he was disappointed when they didn't join him that night.
I really do love how you stuck to canon! This reminds me so much of the Prisoner of Azkaban, and that's my favourite book, so I can't wait to see what you're going to do next with this!
I honestly don't remember if anything was mentioned about Lily's knowledge regarding Remus's condition in the book, but I like that you made her know. It makes sense to me because someone who's smart like Lily, with just a little push in the right direction, leave alone Severus trying to have something against the group of boys who bully him, would've figured it out right away.
Also, here's another thing I liked; it has to do with Remus's characterisation. You would think that someone who has so little control over his and life and his body would want to take it out on the world and pretty much be a control freak; but no! Even with Wolf and his desire to lead, with Wolf's thoughts going through Remus's head, Remus didn't want to feel like he had any sense of authority over his friends. It just makes him seem so humble and wise and I can definitely see him grow into the wonderful man we meet in PoA.
Once again, you've written a marvelous chapter! I enjoyed every single bit of it and I can't wait to see more!
Author's Response: Hey! No worries about when you get here! I'm late replying so really...don't worry about it. :)
I'm glad that you consider this chapter as your favorite! It was indeed fun to write. No one really thinks of Remus and the consequences. I know I never did until I started writing this, honestly. I began to think of all the bad things that could've happened if Remus were to transform and have free reign of the school. Open buffet, no? I'm trying really hard to keep the transformations from sounding too repetitive. So I'm trying to add different moments every time. The one I liked was the spine. It sounded horribly painful when I wrote it!
The whole James/Snape confrontation was hard to write. I was trying to make Snape sound genuine. Angry at James and curious/stubborn about what was hiding under the tree. And yes, Wolf is now very attached to his pack. He considers all three boys his family, people he can trust and rely if things get really bad. Oh the irony in that statement...
I'm trying my hardest to stick to canon. Not changing anything...just showing those moments we never really got to see, just heard of. As for Lily...there really isn't any concrete evidence that she knew about Remus but I think that if she didn't figure it out, James would've told her and she would've been very accepting regardless. However, she is a smart witch so I think she would've figured it out on her own.
Remus has the tendencies of becoming a control freak but he's afraid of losing his friends. His grades and being one of the top of his class tells me that he tries his best to control those things that are easy f and would not get mad at him. He's been alone and is afraid of being alone, that's why he never really tries to become the 'alpha' of the Wolf on the other hand...he IS the Alpha and the other three know better than to challenge a werewolf. :)
I can't wait for you to read the next chapter. I'll be a bit further up his timeline but you'll get to see soon.
Thank you so much for the review!