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Review:Aphoride says:
First of all, I'm so impressed you managed to get this all into only 500 words. They're so so difficult to do (I tried doing one myself once and ended up scrapping it because I hadn't said half of what I'd intended to in the 500 words). Sometimes they can feel under-developed, you know, like it could almost be any person or people, just with certain names, you know? But this wasn't like that, this felt developed and it felt... I dunno, right? Like it should just be this length - no more, no less. I have no idea if that made sense or not, but never mind...

I love how it was Remus and Regulus, both connected by Sirius and to each other separately - through the note - and that was it. Yeah, you mentioned Tonks and Teddy at the end, but they weren't in the story in the same way - they were almost just like additions to the scenery and description, lol. It's not a bad thing - it worked really well here because it allowed you to really focus on Remus and Regulus.

I loved your characterised of them both. They're not friends, so they can't exactly understand each other or anything particularly deep or meaningful, but they've, in a way, shared an important moment for each of them and shared the feelings that accompanied that as well. And that is, in its own way, impossibly intimate and really brings people together, you know. So even though they don't know each other, really, it feels almost like they at least understand each other, without ever exchanging words or anything.

Your mention of Sirius was great, too. I loved how you sort of summarised the whole Sirius and Regulus relationship in that one short line where you described Sirius moving through all those emotions after hearing that his brother was gone. It somehow gave so much depth to it - I honestly don't even know how and couldn't tell you what it is about it that does that, but it just does - and that made this all the more saddening.

Gosh, this was just lovely. So thoughtful - you made me thoughtful, lol - and sad in a kind of way which makes me smile and feel almost proud of these two, because of the significance of those notes they're writing and the actions they do in this. It's odd, but it works.

Gah, this was just lovely :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: I have the opposite problem to you - I can't write a long, detailed piece of fic. I struggle to get past the word limit to be honest, though admittedly this one required a hell of a lot of editing out stuff, so I'm glad the length worked for you.

Remus and Regulus are both fascinating characters in my opinion, because in my headcanon they're almost doubles; they're both quiet and subtle, with an inhuman amount of hidden depths that aren't quite as explored in canon as I'd like.
And yeah, for the purposes of this piece, Tonks and Teddy are basically furniture. XD

I'm glad you've said this because it was one of the things I was going for in this; the idea of... erm... sort of... an individual collectivity? That's a bit of an oxymoron, and you've put it far better than I could have, so I'm going to stop talking about it now.

I've always imagined Sirius as kind of taking emotions like gunshots - quick, but powerful, with long-lasting effect - and I tried to put that into the line, so I'm really glad it worked for you. I've never put so many adjectives into a sentence in my life.

You feel proud of them! I do too! I'm rather fond of them both. :)

Thank you so much for your absolutely wonderful review!


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