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Review:my_voice_rising says:
I really like Amelia. She's very serious and adult-like despite her mother's attempts to ignore her growing up. I like their relationship a lot, as an overprotective mother is rare with OCs because they can get in the way of the plot (as in letting them do things for the sake of the story that a parent would not realistically do.) I would even have liked to see her mother be a little more clingy at King's Cross, even if the only change was that her hug wasn't quick. :)

You really get a good glimpse into Amelia's character when she answers the question about Harry. I think most students would be willing to give at least a somewhat honest opinion, especially when asked by another kid. Obviously Amelia takes herself and her Head Girl duties seriously, which I like.

I also really liked the talk that was given in the Prefects' car of the train--a very realistic touch to a part of OotP that we as readers never got to see. And I love Ron's little cameo, and how he called the Slytherins gits in front of the Head Girl and Boy. And Hermione's aside to Amelia and Oliver was perfect. Very canon.

This is a very well-written story, I can already tell. Can't wait to read on!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like her! I wouldn't say her mother is particularly overprotective as such, but definitely concerned about Amelia and, as you said, not ready to accept her growing up. I think a lot of people tend to ignore the relationship between their OCs and their parents because the OC is at Hogwarts, but it's always been an important thing for me to portray that relationship accurately.

Amelia really does take the role seriously, and has that ability to distance herself from those she has authority over.

A big goal for me is to make sure this story fits into the canon as seamlessly as possible, so I'm glad the scenes with canon characters work. Thanks so much for the review, I hope to see you back for later chapters!

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