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Review:manno_malfoy says:
OH, look who just discovered a new story to stalk! ME! And it happens to be about two characters I really admire -ahem...okay, just one, the other just died.

Okay, squee-ign aside! I think this is such a powerful first chapter! I mean, I don't think I've yet read a fanfic that starts with one seemingly important character dying... wait, how did he die again? Which brings me to my next point! I wonder where you're going to begin the next chapter! Are we going to go on from this point or will you jump back with us in time and let us get to know Dom and Lorcan? I can't be any happier that there's a 'next chapter' button here!

I really adored your description throughout the chapter. The words just flowed with ease and painted surroundings and emotions alike! I think the part that touched me the most was when Dom was thinking about how Lorcan would've had a portrait at St. Mungos too had he survived because, honestly, I think that the hardest part about losing someone you love is thinking about all the things they were yet to do and the things you'll have to make your way through without them. And I loved how this moment was the one that broke Dom and had her try to seek peace somewhere else.

I still can't decide about how I feel about Lysander. I love him by nature because I have a thing for Luna's boys, but this particular Lysander... All I can say is that he's intriguing and I want to know what he has been up to. I'm also very curious about Dom's history with both the boys and can't wait to find out more about that because the scene between her with Lysander was just so intense and brought up all sorts of questions to my head.

Anyway, hopefully, I'll be to review every once in a while as I go on with the story! But I'm so glad I've found this story because it seems to be so promising and so interesting!

-Manno

Author's Response: You are too kind, really. I'm attempting to clear my unanswered reviews (I was on 76, now on 31) and it's so nice to go back and have a gander at all your kind words. I'm so grateful.

It's difficult to balance first chapters I think - you need a good balance of backstory, current action, character introduction etc., maybe even flashbacks. It's 100% more difficult with a murder mystery, because there's clues as well. So much stuff to consider. So thank you so much for your comments.

I was so nervous about writing grief and loss. I - thank Merlin - have never experienced this kind of loss or heartbreak and so I was sceptical about getting Dom's mindset right, especially as she found the body.

HOT IRISH MAN, I'd think it was obvious how you're meant to feel about it!

Thanks for reviewing! I'm so grateful!


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