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Review:Jchrissy says:
This story is really starting out to be funny. I love well written comedies, and I feel like this has absolutely started out that way!

I like your one liners, especially Edie's about.. is your dad a clock-maker? Hahah!

Your grammar was perfect, and I think you did an awesome job using the right feeling for their night out. It was that blurry, a bit too aware without being aware enough, sense and I think you captured that perfectly!

I also loved the look into how close these three (and Lisa) are. It gives you the warm fuzzy friends since childhood kind of feeling, and I loved that. I also enjoyed the look into Seamus's family life with his mother. That line about her just shaking her head when they stumble there just made me giggle.

I really like that they are all kind of part of the real world too. Trying to find their places and figure out where they belong.. even at dead end intern positions! Haha. And I am not too sure what I think about Justin.. he doesn't sound great. But he's also being thought about from intoxicated Edie's mind...

I think this is an awesome start and I hope you continue this! I'm excited to see how these characters develop!

Author's Response: Thanks, Jchrissy!

The clock-maker joke I have to be honest about: my best friend, who I'm sure I'm drawing from when writing about Seamus, actually came up with that. But I thought it fit Edie's somewhat desperate attempts at attracting a mate while intoxicated ;)

I was worried about whether or not it was believable for Edie to be so drunk yet so capable of telling the story of how she knew everybody. I tried to make it sound like the kind of story anybody would be rambling about after they'd already had a few, hehe.

Seamus's mother is actually this really random character who is almost NEVER mentioned in the books, but whom I've always been interested in. I think it was RPing as Seamus once and having to come up with his childhood story that got me thinking about her. But I imagine her to be pretty awesome!

Yes, the whole reason I wrote this story is because I am in Edie's/Dean's/Seamus's exact situation right now. Yet it's something that Rowling completely glosses over (but can ya blame her?) So this fic was born.

Thank you, thank you, THANK YOU for taking the time to leave such a thoughtful review. I really appreciate it. :)

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