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Hello! I'm True Author with your requested review! =]

Hey, you seem to be really worried about your story from the request, but don't worry. You can definitely continue it. =]

First of all, I loved your idea. I seriously never thought that Potters and Weaseleys will be heroes and Malfoys, Knotts, Goyles will be neglected people, so I think you have a very original plot idea and it's absolutely believable. Other thing I liked was how Jade is trying to sound bad. She's actually a lovable person, but she never shows her softer side to anyone.

Still, you have to work on this a little bit. I'll suggest you to format this again. The spaces always ruin the story so copy- paste the whole thing in MS word and try to fix the formatting errors.

There are some parts which are not believable like Rose's characterization. She thinks Jade has no discipline and Jade thinks Rose is a bit bossy am I right? So, if things are like this, Rose'll never go and rearrange Jade's trunk and I don't think Jade'll accept it. so you better not write that. =] Other one is, you mentioned that Jade shut the curtains before she plugged her headphones didn't you? Thenhow on earth did she know that Rose shot her an icy look? =]
As for the genre, I currently didn't see any romance or humor. I don't know where it goes so, =]
Anyways, just fix those errors. Otherwise, you have a definitely original and interesting plot so keep writing! :D

Author's Response: Thank you :) A million, zillion thank you's :) I go fix them :)

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