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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.

Overall, I really liked your portrayal of Regulus Black as a very conflicted young man who is being pulled in many directions at once by the competing priorities and allegiances in his life. All of his reactions seem very natural to his circumstances and his thoughts about the people who matter to him are very believable. There is also a stoic quality to him that seems very fitting for a son of the Noble and Most Ancient House of Black.

I thought that you did a great job describing the moment when he took the Dark Mark. Something about Voldemort's innate cruelty and the level of sacrifice he demands from his followers has always led me to believe that receiving his mark would be a particularly painful ordeal. The price of admission, so to speak. Your descriptions and tactile details made the scene very vivid, especially the part about cutting his hands on the icy rocks on the ground. The notion that he doesn't trust the other Death Eaters and wished to conceal his identity from them was also very sensible. You'd have to be a zealot (Bellatrix) or a fool (Lucius) to put your faith in the sort of people who would willingly associate with the Dark Lord. From start to finish, I thought the meeting of the Death Eaters was done very well.

The idea that he would take a round-about route home in order to not be followed was also a clever little thing that added something to the story.

Wow. You showed us a very different side of Kreacher in this. Imagining the grumpy, foul-mouthed old elf as a caring, nurturing presence in the young lives of Sirius and Regulus took some getting used to, but I like it. To me, it adds a whole extra layer of complexity to the very hostile relationship between Sirius and Kreacher that we see in OotP. From Kreacher's point of view, not only did Sirius betray his family heritage, but there was also a personal sort of betrayal there. Even though the idea of Kreacher singing a lullaby to 17-year-old Regulus was pretty awkward, it really fits with the idea of the intense devotion that Kreacher has for him.

So it seems that Regulus has not completely written off his elder brother the way that their parents have. You did a terrific job of setting the stage for Regulus's ultimate decision to turn his back on the Dark Lord. The description of the terribly awkward family Christmas was a great way to drive home the point.

Suggestions? Well, I did see several typos and grammatical errors scattered about. With one more good proof-read, I think you could really put a bow on this one and have something that you can be very proud of!

Author's Response: Hi and thank you for stopping by for the review. =)

Wow, you really got what I was after with this chapter. I'm really happy about it, since I wasn't sure if it resonated with readers the way I thought it would.

I'm glad it set the stage like it should for later, since this story has quite many twist and turns coming in very near future. In a way this is the most difficult of my WIPs to write, because I'm striving for more than a lighthearted romp here.

I've always thought that Kreacher is actually pretty interesting character. Considering how he warmed up to Harry after he got Regulus's locket, I think its fair to assume that his devotion to the Blacks was probably quite close to unconditional love. After all, he even tried to pilfer Mr. Black's pants. =)

I will try to find another beta for this story. Sadly betas are bit hard to find nowadays.


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