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Review:EverDiggory says:
Woo! What a read. I know, I took a century to get here and I apologize; the wait was ridiculous!

Plot: Wow. Disoriented much? I think my break is what killed me. There is much happening, just the right pace, may I add, that I had a bit of a whiplash and had to go back and reread the first chapter:P I was a little tangled up there. So someone writing a story bout writing a story...Okay! I think this is actually pretty neat! I enjoyed it!

Characterization: I love alphard. I feel like theres so much to know about him I just want to sit down and have a conversation with him! I really, really want to read more about him. Please(;

Dialogue: Maybe it's just me, but the conversations seemed very blunt. But, on a completely different scale, I think Astoria's was just right. Which is really odd, I know, but everyone else's dialogue seemed to need a bit of fleshing out. Again, it could just be me, but it seemed to me that it was all very blunt.

Imagery: I think there should be more of this. This is terribly, terribly difficult to add sometimes but it seems to me like you're just so dang excited about what you're writing you forget to add imagery, you just want to get to the fun part. I am so incredibly guilty of this. Maybe go back and add some in? i think it would add lots to the feel of the story!

Thanks for requesting!

xx

Ever

Author's Response: Hello! There's no need to worry or to apologise about the delay; it's absolutely fine! And I've also taken a while to respond, so yeah...

I'm very happy to hear that you like Alphard because we'll be seeing a lot of him.

As for dialogue, I think I'll try to go over it again and see what I can go, and the same goes for imagery. You are completely right; I do forget to add in the details sometimes, especially when I'm telling things from First POV. Therefore, thank you for pointing that out and thank you for the over all helpful review!

-Manno


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