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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Welcome home, Molly!

This was another great chapter. Molly is so sweet and relatable. I like how Lance calls her the voice of reason. It's such a good match since the last chapter showed Finn being the responsible one in his group of friends. It's great how everyone in both their lives are sort of nudging them to get back together. It's so true how sometimes friends know a relationship is meant to be long before the people in the middle of it all have a clue!

I loved the gift of the greenhouse from her parents. What a lovely touch. I like that maybe it's meant to be a bit of a peace offering from her father. I guess we'll have to wait and see if he has other intentions.

Just one quick bit of CC. In the sentence, "Uh, you kind of do," Molly said, hesitatingly joining the conversation..." I thought the word 'hesitatingly' was a bit awkward. Just "Molly said, hesitant to join the conversation..." might read a bit smoother.

Sorry this is a short review, but I did want to get at least one more chapter in on your story before the end of the month :)

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out that typo, I'll go back and fix it. I'm glad you're still enjoying the story at this point and can see the similarities of Molly and Finn before they are reunited together again. More on her father to come if you decide to return. Thanks again for reviewing, I really appreciate it!

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