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Review:Athene Goodstrength says:
Here from the Strange Meeting challenge!

Well, this was sweet! It was really lovely to get a little glimpse of Neville as a teacher. I can imagine him being quite good at the pastoral side of it as well as being passionate about Herbology (although I canít actually imagine him shouting at students - but if he was going to, it would be to protect his plants!). Heís really understanding and caring, yet still a slightly tired teacher - AND heís very much Neville. I particularly enjoyed his memories of school, particularly of Harry, Ron and Hermione.

I thought the idea of repeating a moment in two different parts of Rose and Nevilleís lives is a great one, really clever and simple. The way that whatís upsetting her changes significantly is a really nice touch- and I really love that itís Scorpius both times!

The first moment is really well chosen, as Neville definitely doubted that he was a true Gryffindor when he was at school. The second moment was just adorable; particularly when you consider the bullying Neville suffered at the hands of Scorpiusís dad! Nevilleís wisdom about courage and bravery was really well written... in fact, it made me feel quite emotional as it reminded me of something my dad told me one when he returned from deployment.

There are one or two misplaced or missing commas, but they didnít detract from the story as a whole.

Overall, youíve done a great job of taking the two characters you were given and writing them in a believable situation. I really enjoyed this - and my favourite line might just be ĎOI! MALFOY!í... she is so Ronís daughter. Adorable.

Athene xoxo

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! :) I'll go and fix some of those grammatical errors asap! :) Ahhh! I feel all fluffy inside now :)

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