|Review:||Athene Goodstrength says:|
Here from the Strange Meeting challenge!
Seeing as this is a pre-written story, I have to ask... where on earth did you come up with the idea for this story?! Dennis Creevey and Blaise Zabini? Thatís such an odd little idea, but I have to say, you really make it work. The plot is simple, but sweet and the simplicity makes it that much more readable, and easier to enjoy the details of the story. Your imagining of the memorial statue is absolutely brilliant; I love the idea of a phoenix rising again and again, with the feathers marking the years.
It's also really nice that you point out that Colin, amongst many others, doesn't get the recognition as 'hero' that he deserves. The thought of Bane and the house-elves dying was really sad!
I LOVE the idea of Harry becoming The Boy Who Died - because after all, he willingly embraced death, thinking it would help save everyone else. But I do enjoy Blaise's sardonic little thought. Once a Slytherin, hey?
There are so many little touches that I liked in this story; Dennis taking photos to Colin, the Creeveys taking away Dennisís wand, Blaise wading in to the disaster and later becoming a Healer. I love any story that mentions Madam Pomfrey!
Your characterization of both characters is very good. I like Blaiseís thoughts about the other Slytherins, and the fact that he still feels shame. I have to say, at first I had to try to not take it personally when Blaise was so scathing about the Slytherins, but then I thought about it, and he was right! Even before I Ďbecameí a Slytherin, I always thought it was a bit too much that not a single one of them stayed to fight - so it was good to see a story in which one of them does try and help.
You wind up this story by doing something totally unexpected... you make it all heart-warming! And you did it beautifully. The memory of Dennis being a small boy wrapped in Hagridís coat, with no clue of what lay ahead for him and his family, and the way that he makes Blaise laugh was really lovely. Then, when they are both lifted up by the Squid, I actually felt a little teary! It was very touching.
There are one or two issues you need to look at - the formatting is all over the place and makes it quite hard to read the story (the line spacing and font etc). Some people might click on it, but not read it because it looks so messy; which would be a huge shame, as this is a lovely little one-shot. The other thing is that there are one or two misplaced quotation marks next to parts that arenít speech. It might be worth just going over the story again, or finding a beta.
However, these little issues didnít really detract from what I think is a lovely, surprising, and touching story. Thanks for entering my challenge!
Author's Response: THank you so much for the review!
I can't claim the idea for this story: it was written for another challenge, redherring's Non-Romantic Pairing challenge.
I never would have thought of these two characters on my own xD
Thank you so much for the lovely review.
I know about the formatting though -_-
I had to get it up before the deadline and the copy/paste from pages didn't work all that well, so i just gave up. i will get it edited soon, so thanks for the feedback :D
I try very hard not to vilify Slytherins in my writing, they get so much flack for being the "bad" house, but really, Slytherin traits are very admirable and they definitely don't deserve to always be the bad guys. A Huffelpuff is just as likely to be a bad person as a Slytherin.
THat's why I made Blaise go back, since we know that he isn't closely related to death eaters, it seemed like he'd be the most likely to return.
Thanks again for the wonderful review!