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Review:Yoshi_Kitten says:
Wow, this was so good! What a way to start off the first chapter. I especially loved the opening paragraph, where you detailed all of Harry's various accomplishments and awards. He kinds of reminds me of old Dumbledore now, lol. Sad thing tho is that at first I was wondering why Harry was the only one talking. But then, to find out that he was actually at her grave... Now that was powerful. Almost made me cry a bit. I guess now I know why Ginny was at Kings Cross with Harry at the end of the prologue. Only question now is: What happened to her? I felt SO bad for Harry at the end when he finally broke down. I think you nailed his thought process tho, spot on. I could see him feeling like he'd failed in protecting her. The part where he said that was supposed to protect everybody was very much like Harry Potter, so excellent job with that. :)

I confess that I've never really ever given much thought to Harry as an old man, but now that I've read this I can totally see it! The house with all the added on rooms, the built in Quidditch Pitch in the back yard, the kids/Grandkids, living on the property right next door to the Burrow. All of it is pure genius! I swear you and JKR have got to be related or something, lol! And I really like the way that you used his talking to Ginny's spirit to fill us in on all the Next-Gen. characters and their kids, very clever idea. And Neville as Headmaster was another added plus - that AND he's married to Luna! OMGosh, I cannot even begin to tell you how disappointed I was to learn that Neville/Luna was not a Cannon ship. So I especially LOVE stories that put the two of them together now, as they should have been, in the books haha! ;)

I couldn't really see Harry referring to Narcissa as "Cissy" tho. Even if she is/was technically family to him now, since Rose & Scorpius got married, even then I still could not see it. But maybe that's just me... I'm really glad that you paired those two up together tho, and I am also glad that their relationship is not 'perfect' neither. There were so many other cool details hidden in this that I just absolutely loved also! Like each of the Potter childrenís career choices, how advanced Lily II was, and Al being in sorted into Slytherin. All in all, I think this was a perfect way to give readers a bit of background information as to what's happened to Harry since the end of DH. And it wasn't like it was an info-overload at all. I think that it was the perfect amount actually, and everything flowed so smoothly. Everything about this is just so fantastic! =)

This story already has so much promise, and I can't wait to read more and see where this goes!! Oh, and sorry for taking so long to get back to reviewing on this. I shall be reviewing the next chapter very, very soon tho, I promise!!

Author's Response: Hello, dear!

So this chapter was one of the ones I'm most proud of in the story, which is rare for the early chapters. As I'm sure you know, when you write a really long story you tend to look back at the early chapters once you're near the end and think, "Holy moly! What on earth was I drinking when I wrote this mess?" But this chapter has held up pretty well for me. It introduces the real central plot conflict of the entire story: Harry's intense, sometimes crippling grief over Ginny's death.

Prior to her death, Harry had built a pretty wonderful life for himself and his family, and I'm glad you liked the details that I introduced in this chapter. There's only one detail that you got wrong, and it's making me itchy to go back and re-read this and see if I accidentally suggested it somehow. Neville and Luna are not married. I think of them both as being widowed in this story. Luna explicitly and with Neville it's just sort of implied. So sorry about that. :-(

Hmmnn... I can see your point on Harry using Narcissa's pet name. That might even be worth changing. I do believe that she would have opened up somewhat, especially after Lucius died and her great-grandchildren were born. But this might be a bit much.

Scorpius and Rose are anything but a perfect couple in this. Much more on that to come...

I look forward to hearing from you again soon! And I need to get back for another chapter or two of your story, as well. Thanks so much!


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