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Review:LittleWelshGirl99 says:
Hey!

This was a really nice take on Remus and Tonks’ relationship- I enjoyed it immensely! I especially liked the flashbacks on Remus’s past relationship. It made his excuse for staying way from Tonks a lot more believable and solid. I honestly can’t believe how terrible and heartbreaking that little side-story was! On their honeymoon?! SO sad! :( If you hadn’t written it so nicely, I’d have thought it was a little too dramatic/over the top, but it definitely worked.

One thing I’m a little puzzled about was wouldn’t Remus have been arrested for killing the girl he loved? (I’m assuming he confessed because it seemed as though her parents knew he’d done it from the ‘look of disguts’ upon their faces.). Even though he’s a werewolf, he still murdered someone…

‘I still hadn’t forgotten the incident.’ –haha I’d imagine no-one could ever forget about the time they killed their new wife.

‘I loved Tonks with all the half of my heart that was still intact’ – so this made me cry.

I really love the idea for this, and it was fabulously descriptive and able to evoke a lot of clashing emotions inside me as all your writing seems to do lottie :). The ending was very sweet and lovely and made me feel all fuzzy!
(the quote was perfect)

-Annon ♥

Author's Response: Annon!

Thank you! The story is probably a dramatic/unbelievable, but I'm glad you found that it worked here! And yes, it is very heartbreaking.. I'm glad that the emotions came through though. :)

Wow, good point, haha. I think I did manipulate the story around just to fit what I had in my mind, and I had to work very hard to try and make it seem as realistic as it was. I don't think I've ever actually thought about the -being arrested- part, and I don't think anyone else has mentioned it either.. but I guess I'll have to try and think of a way around that! :P Thank you so much for pointing that out - I really like my stories to be as believable as possible and that is a very important point to consider! Maybe Remus was exempted from the crime? Like how people with intellectual disabilities often aren't found guilty of crimes because they didn't possess the ability to know what they were doing? Maybe something like that.

Thank you so much Annon! I try to avoid writing cliche stories.. although my Siriusly in Love story is quite obviously cliche.. but I'm glad this one wasn't so much! Thank you for the wonderful review! :)

- Charlotte


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