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Review:True Author says:
Hello! It's True Author with your requested review! =]

First of all, I must say that I especially liked this story because I didn't find a single grammar and punctuation mistake! Your beta reader must be really good or you must be good at grammar. I always love grammatically perfect chapters like this one. So well done!

I also liked the way you're writing this. You're writing the story from a third person and you're doing it very well. The reader perfectly understands Anya's feelings from the beginning. Writing in third person is always a bit difficult and I personally don't try it much! ;)

Another thing I liked is the first paragraph. I never thought about the animals they transfigure! It's good you're thinking about them so much. I never read this fact in any other story.

But still, I would like to suggest one thing. I think you should write about Anya's background, so the reader will be more interested in plot from the start. I think, a normal reader will find the first paragraph a bit boring. (I didn't! ;)

Anyways, I liked this story so feel free to rerequest!

Author's Response: Hi! You've got to know, you must be the first EVER reviewer to comment positively on my grammar. that is so NOT my strongerst point, in fact, i suck at it, because i make sooo many mistakes when i write. But i have had this chapter betaed and rewritten it so many many times that now it's been cleared out.
I usually write in third and sometimes second -person since i find first person to be difficult. I like switching point of views and i feel that a story told in first person doesn't give me as much freedom to manouver.
Yeah, transfiguring animals into objects always seemed a little cruel to me, and it sounded like something my character would think, since she is not that fond of magic anyway.
There is more information about Anya's bacground in the next chapter but i have kept the real details hidden for most of this story, because of the way i write. I have kinda chosen this moment in time to start the story and everything about the character unfolds as the characters lives through things, to avoid putting too much information out for the reader. My thinking was that it would keep the curiosity alive, and also help the reader identify with Anya on a more emotional level, as a person with these thoughts in this moment, but without a specific history.
Anyway, thank you for your review, Im so very very happy that you liked the first chapter and i hope to be able to request again. :D


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