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Review:academica says:
Hi Rin! I've come to make good on my word :D

I love how you've abstractly set the scene here. Unlike many stories--including some of mine--you don't just spill the whole wedding out to us, taking us carefully through the ceremony and reception. Instead, you artfully drop in little details--the color of a dress, the texture of a ribbon, the pastel, delicate feel of it all--that let us fill in the rest of it. I love the juxtaposition of the fragile little wedding with the well-loved house on the ocean shore. They're both quite tender in their own ways, and the contrast between them and Lysander's awkwardness is quite apparent in the opening.

I love that Lysander was too taken with Scorpius to continue cataloging the rest of the wedding. He didn't even get to do his three word summary of the bride! Hah. That was a good piece of fluff.

Oh my. Warmth and fluff all piled together at the end! I love how the wedding and everyone in attendance becomes total background noise for Lysander, mere faded images next to Scorpius. It's very cute how Scorpius didn't just let Lysander dive into his awkwardness and escape the tension. I sense that they'll be a good challenge for each other, which will create an interesting romance!

Lovely job! Hope this makes you smile!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Oh you did NOT just come by with an unexpected review! You are too lovely to articulate. Bah.

I'm glad you like my fragile wedding and well-worn house! I think I was easily influenced by a homey little wedding I attended this summer, and I tried to make it sound as real and as rustic as possible.

This chapter was, I'll admit, a lot fluffier than the others. :P I'm glad you thought it was good fluff, though, and not just contrived and for the sake of being fluffy. I think he's very taken with him indeed, though I hope not in an obvious, "LET'S GET MARRIED AT ONCE" sort of way.

Your reviews are just so lovely! I don't even know that I've done it justice in responded, but I hope I have. You are just a marvelous, fantastic person, and I absolutely cannot thank you enough.

Much, much love,
Rin


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