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Review:Cavell says:
NO REMUS DON'T DIE ON US *wail*

Phew. Panic over. Gee, Jami, thanks for the stupid scare - though how did Sirius know what to do (serious face)? A lot of people do actually hold tryouts during their stories, and I thought it was very interesting to see how you would pull it off, and I was not disappointed :) I would have liked an explanation on the Quidditch-y terms in that part, though I figure this chapter is long enough so no complaints from me :p

Admittedly, Margaret's introduction was a little choppy. Kind of just "hey there, I'm here!" if you know what I mean, which you probably don't since that didn't make sense. I don't know exactly why it doesn't feel all natural to me - I suppose it's just that her first introduction was dialogue? lol, I don't know :p Just ignore me on this, seriously. Snape, ugh. He and Lily could have worked if they tried, but Jily's my OTP so nope, stay away, Snape! Though I thought you pulled him off very well in that scene :)

The first/second years! :D Hilarious, I adored the fleeting sight of them even though it was only for like, five seconds. I was utterly confused at first and on the edge of my seat for the confession. I got the gist of it in Sirius' dream at the start, but holy cow, the actual bit was so much better and I'm glad you didn't put it in italics like most do. I didn't expect Lily's parents to be killed, I thought he only killed the girl or something, but WOW. BIG BOMBSHELL, GOSH, JAMI.

It was so intense, I almost cried, but the aftermath was worth and JAMES how could you?!?!? I understand his reaction, but I feel a lot more sympathetic since I actually saw everything from Sirius' eyes. It's what I love about narrators - you never see everything that happens because if you did, everything wouldn't be as fun. EPIC CHAPTER, I LOVED IT, UPDATE SOON, pretty please?

Author's Response: You're review seriously made my life! Bah!

You will find out exactly why Sirius knows that spell, but it won't be until he has to use it again - between chapter 21 and chapter 23, depending on how my outline holds. GOD THIS CHAPTER WAS SO LONG. Haha, I really would have split it up if I could have, I promise!!! I'm happy you liked the bit of tension starting out in the beginning, it was important to me to show that turning into animals/werewolves isn't always just a blast, but that those weekends can be really terrifying.

NOW! Tryouts! I actually had the same thoughts as you, but then I decided if these people don't know what they're trying out for, they better get there butts off the Pitch! I will go into more detail describing the game and plays and such during their firsts Match, in chapter 11!

AND I'M SO HAPPY YOU LIKED THE CAR WRECK SCENE!!! Since the very first chapter when I wrote Lily arriving with Sirius at the Potters, I wanted so bad to publish this! Poor guy :(. I was angry at James when I wrote his reaction too, but I think you'll be happy with their 'apologies' to one another in the next chapter. WHICH I JUST put in the queue like 3 seconds ago! AND it's right under 5,000 words. Better length, ya? Haha.

You're such an awesome reviewer, you seriously always put me in the best moods. Usually only coffee and chocolate put me in such a good mood...

Thanks so much for the review, darling ♥

OH OH. And yes, I would ship James and Lily with every ounce of my dying breath! Haha! I can't even read Snape and Lily, but I thought he deserved *something* in this. Okay, now I'm done ♥

You'll see me very soon with my chapter 9 request!!

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