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Review:Aphoride says:
Okay, I have to admit first off that the only thing I've read of yours (and never reviewed, shame on me for that) is your Lily/James story collection which was just so utterly lovely. All your Next Gen stuff looks so impressive, it all seems to tie together and that kinda scares me a little :P

But, that being said, I kinda regret not reading anything else now. I've never read CINAS, but you don't need to worry about people not understanding this because they haven't read the prequel - this one can stand on its own perfectly easily. You lead the reader into so easily and naturally that I don't even really question things. I'm not wondering how Rose got together with Scorpius or what the relationship between Albus and Bridget is - I just... I dunno, I feel like I understand it all anyway. It's a nice feeling.

Your Rose and Scorpius are somewhat similar to others I've read (I've read a lot of Scorose, though), but they're so obviously their own individual characters and I already know they'll grow so much over the course of the story. I lovelovelove the mention of Draco's parents and how that's a conflict between them, how Scorpius still loves them despite everything, because they're family, you know? Sometimes people seem to look past that too easily... I'm really curious as to whether or not Rose will actually meet Narcissa or not. I get the feeling she'll cave because it's Scorpius asking, you know, but hm... I'll have to see.

I also love how you've developed little departments in the Ministry which we don't really hear much about - like the Magical Creatures Department by creating the DCB. It fits into JKR's world so easily and nicely that it almost seems like she could have created it herself and you found it somewhere on a tiny corner of the internet, lol. But it's yours and it's a fantastic idea.

It's really clever how you managed to slip in the main source of conflict (Scorpius being a Healer and Rose working in the DCB, therefore getting injured a lot and how that will effect their relationship) in a simple conversation with Albus. You could have started it with her in St Mungo's or something with a bigger bang, but this, I think, worked better. It allows tension to build (and I like tension :P), and means that we're already looking and waiting for that eventual explosion when something does go wrong. Your storylines are so developed as well, with the meeting-the-family kinda thing running underneath, what with Scorpius' first Weasley Saturday and him asking Rose to meet his grandparents. It feels very plotted and well-thought out, which is something I always admire because I'm hopeless at plotting :)

Your style is so easy to read, as well. It feels so effortless, and long paragraphs in this (not that there are many I'd call long at all) really don't phase me because it's so easy and quick to get through them.

Ah, I really wanna know what happens. Will Rose meet Narcissa or not? Will she have met Lucius by the end of the story? I'm looking forward to the creatures you use in this - there are so many weird and wonderful ones beyond dragons and Acromantula and I'm curious as to which ones are on your list for inclusion.

In short - coz that was kinda like an essay - I really enjoyed it, don't know why I haven't read more of your work, have a lot of questions and want to read on.

Aph xx

Author's Response: Yeah, my next-gen stories do all tie in with each other - don't feel intimidated, though! Everything really can stand on its own. I think about it like, "Well, some readers will be sad that the story is over... but then they'll discover that there three more for them to read and be happy!"

Or something. :P

I actually considered starting with her in St. Mungo's, but I decided not to for exactly the reason you said - starting out there would just destroy the tension and make it a different kind of story than what I really want.

Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad you liked this so much!


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