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Review:George Whitman says:
Hey Branwen! This story's caught my eye because of the whole dragon pox thing and a little inconsistency of Rowling's. I'm talking of course about how witches and wizards are supposed to live abnormally long. We see examples of this but then there is evidence of something amiss in that Harry's paternal grandparents are dead and Sirius's parents are as well. Now of course this was just a matter of convenience for Rowling but as fans we are left to fill in the blanks for deaths that quite frankly shouldn't have happened if the Potters and Blacks really were your run of mill pureblood families. Now of course Rowling has allowed us to pick up hints of this dragon pox epidemic, most glaringly through her mention of Draco's grandfather dying that way. So, shortly, my nerd side took over and I had to read this.

The length of the prologue is appropriate. It sets the tone and the premise sufficiently. An old woman's reflections don't exactly make for attractive reading but it does allow for a mature narration and contains the potential for active scenes from her youth. Conflict is crucially introduced at this stage, with the promising character of Charlus. The reader is allowed to connect via the emotions that are remembered during a eventful time in this woman's life. The ending of the prologue does have a jumbled feel. It seems that the flow is interrupted by a sudden perceived need to introduce the character Catrina. Perhaps you would have done better by withholding this introduction to the beginning of the next chapter.

I hope that another chapter is on the way! Well done!

Author's Response: This review made me so happy.

I love (love, love) disease. That probably sounds weird, but I really do - diseases are just so interesting. Smallpox is one of my favourites - again, it's just fascinating to look at how it works and how it's shaped the world and the political debates about it that continue to this day - so, of course, I was all over dragonpox the minute it got mentioned in the books. :P

I do see what you mean about Catrina, and I think I'll edit that before I put up the next chapter. Thank you for the suggestion! :)

I'm hoping to get chapter 2 up soon - I've been working on it, but I kind of want to finish up a few of my other WIPs before really embarking on this one, so it might be another couple months.

Thank you so much for the review! :)

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