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Review:academica says:
Hi! I'm here from review tag :)

So I think this is a cool idea for a story, and I feel like the Malfoy family would fit well with Hamlet. I like how you've inserted familiar characters into the appropriate roles, like Dobby as a guardsman. I always felt like he had a unique perspective on the family, and so I like that he gets to tell the story in this chapter, in a way. It was cool to see him interact a little with Blaise in this chapter, too.

I've got a couple of critiques for you. I saw quite a few punctuation, grammar, and spelling errors in this chapter. I think a beta could help you clean that up, and it would really improve the readability of this piece. Additionally, I think it would be good if you could go back in and edit it to make it a bit longer. You could add in more imagery and maybe even a little bit of back story in the details. Finally, I know this is probably just a personal choice, but reading the Malfoys' names as you have them written irked me a bit and broke up the flow for me. They sounded like stage directions inserted into the middle of an ongoing story. I'd recommend using plain old "Draco Malfoy" and "Lucius Malfoy."

That said, this is a promising start! Nice job!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for the review and sorry for the late reply!
I'm glad you like it and thanks for the CC, I'll go thorugh and edit it. :)
Thanks again for reviewing! :)


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