So, I usually try to pick a story a part so I can tell writer author what I loved about it, why I loved it, (or didn't) and those kinds of things. I can't pick this apart. I can't even begin to, and it's not meant to be. The style you've chosen is completely one that revolves around feeling more than meaning. It matters what it made me feel, what you're descriptions and what you managed to characterize Regulus as through this, what those things did to me. I just wanted to keep reading. I was inside this person who has so many contradicting qualities and I never wanted it to stop, because you've made him (if possible) an even more complicated an amazing character.
I *loved* your comparisons to the Dark Mark and the Mark of Cain. You are such a creative writer, it blows me away.
Regulus isn't good or bad, he's in the grey.†He's nothing but a saint to Kreacher, and nothing but a weak willed coward to Sirius. He's not a hero, but he did an incredibly heroic thing.†He's not a devil, but he signed up for a very hellish crusade. I don't know if this review makes any sense, but your story attacked me with a thousand different feelings. That's the mark of a truly talented writer.
Abstract is my favorite thing, and you managed to give this that feeling while still throwing me in the face of his reality... gah. You're so talented ♥ Oh, and I just want to be in your mind when you come up with these truly astounding pieces of imagery. Pretty please?
Author's Response: Oh my, I'm sorry for having left this response so long! I'd entirely forgotten about it, which is unforgivable. Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review this story - your reviews mean a lot to me (more than my late response implies)!
I really like what you've said about the style revolving around feeling rather than meaning. It makes a lot of sense, though it's not something I purposely wrote into the story. By this point, Regulus is already lost, and so I suppose that there is no meaning left for him. Also based on that, I see Regulus as a kind of Romantic poet, rather like Keats, burning out so quickly and never being recognized until much too late. Regulus is definitely part of the school of sensibility/feeling, though he lacks focus and control. Part of that is his age, but there's something else that I can't put a name to, something wrong with his mind that leads to his fracturing.
This story makes me think too much. :P It's very complicated because Regulus is a complicated character. What you say about him is perfect - he's so grey-area, ambiguous, unknown, like a hole in the story because we only see opposite sides of him (Kreacher's and Sirius's). That confusion becomes central to his characterization in this story - he's always two-sided, inside and out.
I'm really glad to hear that the story was able to evoke strong emotions. It's terrible to admit, but I love being able to do that to readers - it's a great sign of success, of capturing their hearts and imaginations. Thank you very much for the compliments! They had me squeeing the first time I read them, and now they have me doing the same again. ^_^
Haha, you definitely wouldn't want to be in my head when I'm coming up with those kind of things. It's very... strange. It takes a peculiar mind-set to put those phrases together and have them make sense. The greatest challenge can be in keeping a consistent image or metaphor throughout a whole story - sometimes I'm lucky, but at other times, as with this story, it requires constantly going back and revising without ever truly being satisfied.
Thank you again for the fantastic review! :D