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Review:AdeleShare says:
Hey again! Sorry it's taken me awhile to get back again. I've had a rough week, so I am sorry if the quality of my review is lesser.

I am still enjoying yous story, and liking Dorcas more and more. She is a very believable character. Her flaws make her seem very human, as does her attachment to her sister. I would like to hear a little more on her parents though. You attempted to explain her mothers disdain for the wizarding world, but I'm not sure you got it across. I am confused. If she disliked it, why did she go to Hogwarts? She married a Squib, so she must have known that mixed with her Muggle-born magical blood and his magic-born Squib blood, there was a pretty darn good chance that she'd have magical children... She seems sorta suprised by this? Or expecting it, but, as I said, disdainful. I don't think we got enough info about her. Why didn't she like magic? I could get if she had married a Muggle and was hiding it, but when the girls came of school age, the father'd need to know where his children were getting sent for school anyway. I don't know, I just didn't think you gave enough to the reader about this. Please don't think I'm being harsh, that is not at all my intention. I would just understand better if these kinds of thing weren't just glossed over.

And at the end there, with Bella's letter! Gahh! Nothing can happen to Amber!!

Anyway, I still think you're doing a bang up job :D

~AdeleShare

Author's Response: Any review is a perfect review! Besides, you gave some CC which is always good. Hopefully RL gets better soon.

I'm sorry that the information I was trying to get across about her mother didn't come through that well for you. I'm going to try and clarify it now and then I'll have to take another look at the chapter to see if there is a way to make it more clear.

Mrs. Meadowes is a muggleborn witch. When she first found out she was a witch, she didn't have any aversion to it and was actually quite excited. She went through and graduated fine from Hogwarts, but as more and more time passed, she found herself getting more and more homesick in the wizarding world. As fascinating as she finds it, she doesn't view it as her world. She missed her muggle way of life and after graduation she returned to it. She felt no desire to continue to utilize her magic, so she didn't. She married a squib instead of a muggle because while she wasn't enamored with the wizarding world, at the time it was an undeniable part of her, and she wanted someone who would understand while still being willing to dwell in the muggle world with her. Her disdain for magic didn't come until later, when Dorcas all but abandoned her family in favor of the muggle world. She resented the world that she never felt like she fit in but that so readily stole her daughter away. It certainly didn't help when Dorcas became so involved in the war, putting herself in constant danger. Mrs. Meadowes saw the wizarding world stealing her child's youth and future, and her feelings towards it went from indifference to complete disdain. So while she definitely anticipated that her children would be magic, it was difficult to anticipate that she would have a child like Dorcas who would so readily give up the world she grew up in, because Mrs. Meadowes herself struggled so much to do the same thing.

I hope that cleared it up a little, though it is a bit long. Like I said, I'll have to look and see if I can make that clearer within the story.

Ahh, the letter! I agree :D

Thanks for the review!

~Cassie


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