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Review:adoranymph says:
Another awesome chapter! and i liked how the internal conflict here was Remus trying to decide if his new friends were good or bad, and just as well, whether HE was good or bad.

I laughed when James said that bit about detention breaking child's labor laws, and now you've got me wondering why Sirius was so quiet about the whole card castle thing, saying he'd never really played it before when James said every wizard kid did at least once. And as usual I found James and Sirius' clever retorts to Downing very witty and spot on.

Speaking of which, I also liked that here you give James and Sirius some nobility to their talk-back attitude, that they have an impatience with people who demand respect when they haven't earned it (just like Harry) and that they're trying to make the point that everyone deserves to be treated the same, and that includes not treating others as though they are lower than you, no matter if you're a prefect or a pure-blood, not matter if they're a first year or a half-blood or muggle-born.

very well done! :D

also thought the ending was sweet, and i thought Remus' parents' letter was too, though i felt a pang when they mentioned Severus because at this point we see that Severus has his own not-so-nice qualities, however James and Sirius (unfortunately) treat him. And I like how we're really beginning to see theories of Severus' jealousy of James' talents (not just of Lily's attention, that's not till later and right now seems to be more focused on Remus because he gets on with Lily well enough) emerge, and the rivalry that will ultimately peak there. excellent!

10/10

Author's Response: Thanks for your review, I really appreciate it, you're so good, thanks a million.

I am really glad you liked Remus question whether his new friends were good or bad. I was again just playing with that idea that he likes to be liked and as a result cuts people a lot of slack, you know?

In terms of why Sirius was quiet, yeah, that will come into play later on. You are very astute to pick that out, or maybe I made it too obvious! I don't know, but I like to just think that you have a real eye for spotting important stuff.

I am glad you liked the idea of me providing some justification behind why James and Sirius act that way they do. I just felt I had to give a reason, because both the boys are good people, but they are bullies too, so I just thought there had to be some sort of method behind their madness, if that makes any sense.

I am glad you liked the inklings of Snape's jealousy coming through. It was focused on Remus initially, because he befriended Lily and Snape was afraid that if Lily made new friends, then she would not want to be his anymore. But once he sees that Remus is no longer a threat, that Lily is still his best friend, his anomosity turns towards James, for being brilliant and popular and very pig-headed.

Anyway, thanks so much for the review. I really appreciate it! It's good to get feedback on the chapter, just to see if people think it's okay! Thanks so much again, and I can't wait for more 'Moonlight' and 'Rampent Magic'. :)

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