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Review:StormThief17 says:
Hi, it's me!

This ending...I wanted chapter 6 so badly. Helga is in such an intense position. I can't see any easy solution, and I don't want to see Helga hurt. I've become quite attached to her :).

Salazar's attitude towards Godric made me so angry. Like really mad. But now of course I'm even more curious about what happened that made him the way he is!

I have one comment/critique for you: what's happening with Elaine during all of this? Is she the only other adult besides the Founders or are there others? If she's the only one, how does she feel about the camaraderie between the founders and does she feel left out? If there are others, who are they and what are they like? I think you just need to work Elaine in a bit more. I'm always wondering where she is during the chapter.

The plot is really getting interesting, and you've created a lot of suspense. The cool thing is that you've created that suspense without using a bunch of action or anything violent really, it's just the relationship between Salazar and Helga, and both of their secrets. Keep up the great work!

-Kathryn

Author's Response: Kathryn! I'm so excited you stopped by!

Aww I'm glad you're attached to Helga! And I totally know the feeling. While I was writing, I just felt so awful for her :( And Salazar's motivations are sort of murky right now, but more will be revealed soon (like, next couple of chapters soon.)

You're so right about Elaine! She does get some time in the next chapter, but I definitely see what you mean about just leaving her hanging in this chapter. I'd love to go back and edit this when I get a spare minute, and I will definitely keep your critique in mind :)

I hoped to keep raising the stakes and upping the drama as the story went on. And I've learned that I tend to be better with character-driven stuff than plot-driven. I'm so happy it's keeping you interested!

It means so much to me that you came by to review! I'm working on ch. 6 now, so hopefully it won't be too much longer till I can update again. Thanks again for your great comments :)

--Maggie


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