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Review:Remus says:
Heya!! Perelandra here with your review!! :D Ugh, just by the summary, I have a feeling that I might cry! Should I get a box of tissues ready?

Just so you know I have two windows up, one with your story, the other with the review box. And as I'm reading along, I'm dreading where this is going. You manage to paint the picture through imagery and words that suck me and I find myself scrolling down to read more when I should pause and review. Haha!

Teddy's angst feels so real and like I said...I'm afraid of where this is going to go.

I love this part right here: "He was their leader, their guide, their king and he blossomed in his role. He led their gang with pride and spirit and they doted on him. When they were pirates, he was their captain..."

Also, I like how you're sort of having a flashback without labeling it "flashback". It feels like its a story within a story, you know. Sometimes, however, it became a bit difficult to tell where in Teddy's timeline we're on. Perhaps if you were to add a bit more detail such as description, it will take care of the problem.

Aaand I'm crying. For some odd reason, any story that has Teddy going to visit Remus and Tonks' grave site makes me cry.

OH NO FRED!! That is so sad!!!

I can't even imagine what would be going through George's mind at this point, you know. He lost his brother, named his son after him and then lost him as well. Baaahhh!!! :'( X 1000

Overall this was a fantastic read. Sad, very sad indeed but a great read!!

Thanks for posting/requesting this piece!

--Rosie

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for a great review! I'm glad the angst feels real, I really poured my heart into it so that means so much to me :)

I know what you mean with the flashbacks. I hope it wasn't too distracting. There are 3 aspects to the story - the flashback in italics, the present tense denoting current events after the accident and then any paragraphs in past tense are chronological flashbacks in the past.

Thank you so much :)


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