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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Yay! Lily is pregnant with Harry... can't wait for him to make his first appearance! And I enjoyed this chapter, too. Though, a couple critics, when you have a sentence before dialogue you want to end it with a period (not a comma like you did) before the dialogue. It's more grammatically correct. And then I noticed you had two spaces between each sentences (you only need one space between sentences). Then there were some typos, but nothing I was able to glaze over while reading.

I especially loved Sirius's boistous attitude when he started questioning whether he was going to be godfather (should should kept lowercase). And having Voldemort be the one to draw both Lily and James to Lily's pregnancy first was definitely an interesting twist considering where we're all leading (with Voldemort killing James and Lily and failing to kill Harry due to Lily's protection, thus being torn from his body into oblivion to wait for a follower to find him) at the end of James and Lily's story. Anyway, great chapter! :)

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