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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! Let's see what new adventures Pansy has today!

"And yet she stopped herself from talking about her family, her mother and father, with that same fondness because she was supposed to be a changed person. And a changed person could not love her Death Eater father." - This made me kind of sad. There's still an awful lot about love and relationships that she doesn't understand.

I love the prank that Jonathan plays on Teresa. It reminds me a little of Jim and Dwight from The Office. He is definitely starting to grow on me.

Pansy makes an interesting sort of progress when she apologizes to Terrance. Obviously it would have been better if she'd simply been able to talk to him, but the letter is definitely more consistent with her upbringing. I suppose it also eliminated the possibility of an unfortunate slip of the tongue. I definitely liked the thought process behind it.

"Astor, as comforting as he was, wasnít much of a help in this area. Her feelings for him were uncomplicated and without motive, and she was more thinking than feeling in her attitude towards her co-workers." - What a brilliantly unintentional revelation!

I found myself wondering who the Auror was that made Pansy so upset. I suppose it wasn't important to the plot, but you did indicate that they recognized one another, which was sort of a tease on your part. Her bristling reaction to his presence and his authority over her seemed very sensible and in line with her character. She has not let go of the anger that she feels about the way her family was treated after the war. From her point of view, the Auror enjoyed toying with her, although I supposed that could have been colored a bit by her perception.

The way you ended the chapter was perfect, I thought. Pansy stewing in her own anger, unable to share it with anyone because of this emotional wall she's erected around herself. I have to imagine that these lumps in her throat are going to become more and more common, and it makes me sad for her.

I noticed two fairly minor typo's you might want to take another look at:

-- "that it was alright to have experience delays..." - I think either have or experience needs to go away in this sentence.

-- "Pansy learned that she had moved out of her parentsí house over two years to rent a flat." - two years ago?

Overall, another good chapter. She's trying so hard, but she still doesn't seem to know quite what to do. Hopefully her walls will begin to come down at some point. Til next time!

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks once again for reading and reviewing and I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond to your review!

Yes, Pansy's still fairly ignorant when it comes to love and relationships. Writing from her perspective can be a little depressing because of this- she truly doesn't understand how to relate to other people, even when they try and reach out to her.

Haha- I'm glad that you like Jonathan. He's definitely an interesting character and very different from Pansy.

Yes, Pansy is slowly changing. It's currently out of her mindset for her to apologize in person but she's beginning to recognize the need for it, even if it's not as pure-hearted as might have been preferred.

I wasn't really thinking about a specific identity when I wrote the Auror section. In my mind, he would only know her through the Auror presence in her manor a few years ago as well as the documents the department is sure to have on her family. I wrote her anger at his presence because he's a very physical reminder of the reason why her family lost their prestige as well as for his condescending attitude towards her. If you look at the situation outside of her perspective, I think that the Auror had a very brisk and harried manner and clearly expected her to help him very quickly... And she translated this assumption into something more personal.

I'm so glad that you liked the way I ended the chapter! Pansy is still very obsessed with her image and she won't allow herself to share any of her vulnerability with the world. Yes, you've spotted it right- the lumps are going to appear more often before being replaced by something else.

Thanks for pointing out those typos! I'll be sure to go back and fix them!

I hope to post the next chapter within the next couple of days. Thanks once again for reading and reviewing!


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