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Review:patroni says:
I am really, really intrigued by this story. From the start, you threw us into the thick of it; no tedious settting-up, no character-exposition through monologues. We were pushed immediately into a world chock-full of stuff: a million bits of information (a Hogwarts quidditch team!) a large cast of unruly subjects, established histories of rivalry and friendships. I loved that and loved how busy it kept me, having to figure out how things connect and who talks to whom. This is really mature writing, expecting the reader to do some of the work on her own, and I really appreciate that.

You're also working with a really unique story- not just in terms of the plot, but also in that you sort-of have two 'central' characters in Angie and Albus (unlike I'm reading it wrong), who are swirling towards a common scene without getting there (yet). I find Angie's portrayal incredibly interesting and new as also Albus and all of the other characters that you've set up. I like especially that each character has a defined relationship with at least two others, reminding us of the larger web of relationships (Wyatt and Angie; Lily and Dave).

Two last yays and I'm done. To the description of Professor Vector's office: yay! I'm in Slytherin on Pottermore and I could see her office fit right in with the shimmering-glassy-green of the common room there. And to putting a Slytherin-Ravenclaw rivalry at the forefront of the story: yay! I do hope that you decide to continue with this at some point. If not, thank you for a lovely beginning. And sorry about the long review!

Author's Response: Hi Patroni!

Thanks for the lovely long review. I'm very happy to keep you busy, especially in a good way. And it's excellent that you don't mind doing some of the work because I think that's where the fun is (in reading and writing).

You're reading correct - Angie and Albus are the central characters. They share the stage with a lot of players in the mix, but they will carry the story. And whether they like it or not, their paths are going to cross :) I love that you mentioned the larger web of relationships. You're so right, everyone has their own circle. I'm glad that plays out well with these characters.

I had fun with Vector's office. I like to think that the living spaces of the dungeon have their own unique beauty. Haha, the rivalry! Sports really are the great equalizer, capable of bringing out the best and worst in anyone.

I am continuing, for sure. How could I not after such lovely reviews? I hope to post the next chapter soon.

Take care!
~TY


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