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Review:AdeleShare says:
Hi! Back with your review!

I really enjoyed this chapter as well! I feel we are getting to know Dorcas alot better. But I don't see her being the apparently grumpy all the time girl that she was described as previously. I'm not sure that I want her to be that way, but as she was described like that, a bit of continuity on the point would be good.

THere were a few sentences that could have been structured better, but I'm not going to get into that unless you want. I didn't notice any blazing grammar or spelling errors.

I am getting really into this story. I think you do a great job setting up the plot line in this chapter and I can't wait to see what's going to happen.

Please re-request if you want :D I'd be happy to oblige again :D

~AdeleShare

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks for stopping by!

I'm glad you feel like you're getting to know Dorcas better. I'll have to look and see if I can find any way to clear up the misconception I apparently set up in the first chapter. While Dorcas can be rather grumpy and doesn't particularly want relationships with new people, she isn't a miserable person. There are moments in this story when she is happy. Soon, her mood begins to fluctuate depending on the sort of situation she's in. I'll have to see if there is a way I can make that clearer from the beginning, so thank you for pointing it out.

I still haven't really edited this story at all, so I don't doubt for a second that's the truth :P

I'm glad you like it. I will definitely be back to rerequest.

~Cassie


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