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Review:StormThief17 says:
I really like the way you portray the relationships within the order. I think Alice is a very sweet person, and I love the girly gossip going on between her and Hestia. Like I've said before, you do a wonderful job of combining both the tragedy and regular life of the time period.

Also, I really liked the way you wove all sorts of things in here--the order/voldemort, Lily and James' relationship(even mentioning Snape!), James' dad, and maybe, just maybe, hints of Peter's true nature. Maybe I'm crazy, but the whole thing with him complaining about being left out makes me think it could play a part--however insignificant--in his betrayal. That's just me.

Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing again! :D

I'm so glad you like the other Order members. It's difficult to deal with such a large cast of characters--not only because you have to flesh out their personalities, but also because once you've done that, you have to figure out a way to actually include them in the story! Alice is indeed very kind, although I wouldn't necessarily let her fool you into thinking that she doesn't have a tough side. ;)

I'm happy to hear that everything was woven together in a way that you enjoyed. :) It sometimes feels to me like I'm either doing too much tragedy or, conversely, not paying attention to it enough. It's nice to know that I've struck a good balance!

Peter is a very complex character to me, and I think the motivation for his betrayal was the sum of a lot of different parts. I think that feeling left out did probably play into it, though in my mind, it wasn't his biggest motivator. I'm hoping I'll get a chance to explore it a bit later on, even though it'll be limited because I'm writing from James & Lily's perspective. (But if you're curious, you can always get in touch with me on the forums and I'll be happy to elaborate!)

Thanks again for the review! Glad you enjoyed the chapter!


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