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Review:daretodream says:
Hello!

Oh wow, I wasn't expecting that ending! You caught me by surprise, that's for sure.

I was hoping and praying through the whole entire oneshot that it wasn't Remus who had attacked her. He would never forgive himself for that, especially if he loves Esther. I can't help but feel such sorrow for the both of them, Esther for the wolf that haunts her and Remus for knowing what he did to the girl who he cared for so much.

I liked your character of Esther in this one shot, though I can't help but wonder what she would have been like without the wolf's presence. Was she sweet? Smart? All things we don't know because they weren't the focus of this piece. You did a wonderful job of maintaining your focus.

Remus was just so thoughtful in this fic, just like he is in JKR's canon. I thought it was particularly cute when he stole the dreamless sleep potion from Snape's personal stores. He went to a lot of trouble for the girl she loved, so she could sleep peacefully after the nightmare that she endured.

But that ending, oh gosh. My brain went from horror that Esther was outside with Remus as a werewolf to worry about her reaction when Sirius told her what I had already figured out was the truth. It was only then that I got the hint of what Esther was about to do, and the sadness was the dominant emotion.

I love that the last thing she remembered was the feel of Remus' lips and the cackling of the fire.

Great job with this one shot! Keep writing!

~Cassie

Author's Response: Hey!

I just like breaking people's hearts. It was always going to be Remus that attacked her -- it was no secret to the readers.

Thank you! Before the attack, Esther was just a normal girl, nothing cliche'd and nothing important; just a normal girl and I think that's why the attack shook her up more than it would a normal person: because she had no persona that she had be.

I'm glad you liked the characterisation of Remus. I was really worried about that because I'd never written him before and he's always struck me as a complex character. It had to be stolen from Snivellus's supply, purely for the fact that he was Marauder.

Thank you!
Jasmine, x


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