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Review:TheHeirOfSlytherin says:
Hey. It's SamMalfoy93 here, for the challenge.

At first I thought flying would be the obstacle Albus had to get past, whether it was finally getting the hang of it or admitting defeat. But then he told James the truth and asked for help, and it just made me love this one-shot even more. It was so simple, but, like with you and your sister, so real. Expectations like that is something lots of people can relate to (not me in my family, though :P). And I love Albus and James and I too like to think that he would still be a good brother and be supportive.

The way you started the story with Al and Harry in third person was really interesting. A nice touch, I think. And I really liked that the rest of the story was in first person from Al's point of view, knowing exactly how he feels about the situation and realizing why he's so determined was great this way. There are things you may never know in third person.

This was amazing, I loved it. Thank you for entering this into my challenge. And I'm sorry I've been so late with this; I started college and now I'm sick. But it will not be an excuse today. The results should be out soon. :D

Sam.

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you for reviewing :)

Flying was originally the only obstacle that I had decided on, but as I started writing it became more about Albus gaining confidence in himself especially when he talks to James. I'm glad it turned into something that people are able to relate to, because it definitely adds more dimensions to the character and makes the whole story more believable. And yay! I'm glad you liked it! :)

I don't usually write in third person because as you said, there are things that you can find out in first person that aren't always apparent in third person. So I'm happy the flashback didn't take away from the story!

Thank you so much for creating this challenge! It was the first one I entered and I really enjoyed writing this :) And no worries, I totally understand. I hope you feel better soon!

Thank you again for leaving such a lovely review :D


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