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Review:javct says:
javct45 here with your requested review!

Sorry for taking so long; I'm in the last two weeks of school for the term so things are a bit hectic :/ Anyway, this story is really intriguing so far. I adored the start, that narration was just amazing (give me anything deep and meaningful and I'll swoon)

I can't comment on characterisation because this is the first chapter -- and almost like a prologue -- but it seems to be heading in the right direction.

You shouldn't worry about the narration, I think it's really good. Narration is a brilliant tool, and, when used correctly, it can ultimately affect the whole story.

Your OC is intriguing; I really like her :) There will be more feedback in the later chapters!

Onto the next chapter,
Jasmine, x
(Also, you used Tom Hiddleston in the banner. I love you!)

Author's Response: Hey Jasmine!

So sorry for the delayed response! Your review was wonderful and I am so glad you felt that the beginning was meaningful and deep :3


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