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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
Normally I would've gone for the angst, but it's James and Lily and a colicky baby. How could I say no to that?

I love stories that write about the real problems of being a parent. It's so unrealistic for James and Lily to have had a perfect time being parents to Harry and I think this was the perfect snapshot into their lives. Exhaustion is the best way to describe it and I think you did a wonderful job showcasing how utterly at their wit's end they were, trying to think of ways to quiet Harry's crying. You could see it in the way that Lily was slightly hysterical and her silly worries about being a terrible mother.

James was perfect here. So patient and sweet to Lily. I love how tender he is, especially when he rests his head on her chest and then later when he kisses her neck. It's so sweet and reminds me why J/L is one of my OTPs.

I kind of chuckled at the end, but I feel like it's so realistic for them to finally have some alone time - someone else to watch Harry - but to just fall asleep because of how exhausted they are.

This was a really cute and sweet look at first time parents and the struggles they deal with, and I'm glad to see something a little fluffy to remind me of how such good parents they were before their untimely demise. :(

I loved it!

Author's Response: I was *so* surprised you went for this once and not the angst! But I'm a bit proud of it, so i was happy you did. The angst one also centers around child abuse, and that isn't everyone's cup of tea.

I hate when these two are portrayed as constant saints. They were human beings, regular people who put their lives on the line for what they believed in. They weren't these amazing humans, they were normal people who died for an amazing cause, and I think recognizing and showcasing that makes their sacrifice much stronger. Because saints are supposed to die to save, amazing people are supposed to do amazing things... but these were just two young parents who were truly heroes. Okay... sorry I get a bit carried away with these two, haha!

Hysterical Lily was SO much fun to write. I work with a lot of first time parents who think their five month old has a behavioral issue just because they won't stop crying, and I've seen mothers do everything from fall onto my office floor bawling to begging me to recommend that they get a live in nanny to help.Haha! I tried to put Lily kind of in the middle of the spectrum.

I don't get to start writing Lily and James as parents until chapter 9 of the sequel to Before They Fall, so this was a fun little way for me to get out some of my L&J as mommy and daddy-ness out.

Thanks for the awesome swap, darling ♥!!!


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