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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
I missed this story! I think over Thanksgiving break, I'm going to have to spend the week catching up on all the fics I've been slacking on.

I really liked the opening scene. I could imagine all the guys tumbling in through the fireplace and complaining about how awkward their entrance was.

I also love Athena and their introduction to her, especially her mind-reading. But I also love the banter between the men, especially when they were teasing Doge about all the women in his life. I think that's such a strong talent you have - writing realistic dialogue between the men that adds to the excitement of their missions and the war itself.

I was really disappointed that John and Daisy didn't get to kiss! I was waiting for it, but I knew since you were slowing it down that something would happen to interrupt them. The other men weren't subtle at all about leaving the two of them alone, were they? Ha.

I enjoyed that you interspersed their mission with a bit from Grindelwald's POV. You can really get a feel for his power in that small section and how the Muggles seem to idolize him for his magic and what that can do for them.

I'm glad you included small details about their mission, like them wearing Greek farmer outfits and Daisy and MacDonald having to wear headscarves because their hair would give them away. It's little details like that that make your story realistic. Plus, your descriptions are just fabulous. I love how vividly I can imagine every scene you write. It makes reading your fics quite enjoyable.

I loved Dumbledore's part too! I know I said this before, but I'm glad you're tying canon events into this as well, and it's interesting to see Dumbledore's POV of the whole Chamber of Secrets debacle. And McGonagall! I love how Dumbledore has plans for her. That makes me really excited to see where you take this.

I'm sorry for how terribly long it's been since I last r&r'd this fic, but hopefully I can get through the rest of it soon. I'm enjoying it a lot. :)

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review!

I've been trying to capture the global perspective of the conflict as much I can, so that creates a role for characters like Athena. Plus I remembered that one of the books mentioned Doge going on a trip around the world when he finished school, so that kind of ties in as well.

Nothing can ever come easy for John, but I'm sure you've probably put 2 and 2 together about where that ship is going.

Thanks for reading this far, and I hope you njoy the rest of it when you get the chance!

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